Two new dribbles

[dreamflower]

Two dribbles written for the great_tales 55 word challenge.

Title: Grey Havens
Rating: G
Fandom: The Lord of the Rings (bookverse)
Character(s): Samwise Gamgee, Meriadoc Brandybuck, Peregrin Took
Summary: Watching the Ringbearer's ship sail away...

Grey Havens

There is a reason they call it the Sundering Sea.
Standing at the quay, heart cords are stretching, breaking—
To sounds of surf and cry of gulls,
As sails vanish into a westering sun
Beneath the cold stars of heaven.
One last smile to remember,
One last kiss farewell.
Sam, Merry, Pippin
Turn now,
Homeward.


Title: Composition
Rating: G
Fandom: The Hobbit
Character(s): Bilbo Baggins
Summary: On his way home from Adventure, Bilbo tries to distract himself with a bit of versifying…
Author's Notes: Another dribble. I could not resist. I am imagining Bilbo sitting in the dark listening to Gandalf snore and thinking it is taking entirely too long to get home. (I seem to have hit on a “going home” theme here…)The parts in italics are from "Upon the Hearth the Fire is Red", from FotR, Book I, Chapter III, "Three's Company".

Composition

Upon the hearth the fire is warm…no, not right.
The fire is red … that will do, I’m sure.
Red, head, dead. No, no don’t think that!
Red, lead, bed. Of course that’s it!
A bed, clean, soft and dry…
beneath the roof, so safe…
Wish I was there,
so I do…
Bag End,
home…


(Cross-posted from great_tales

Comments

[addie71.livejournal.com]

These are lovely. The first one breaks my heart, the second makes me smile.

[shirebound]

These are wonderful. That first one is soooo poignant, and the second... LOL, Bilbo goes through the same writing challenges as the rest of us!

[dreamflower]

Thank you!

The Grey Havens are always heartbreaking, no matter what! And I'm glad seeing Bilbo trying to compose made you smile!

[dreamflower]

Thank you, dear! The scene at the Grey Havens is always so sad.

Poor Bilbo-- he doesn't even have an easily available online rhyming dictionary to help him out, LOL!

[ellynn-ithilwen.livejournal.com]

Very lovely. :) The second is soooo sweet. :)

Btw, dribble is an official name for this form/word number, or...? *unsure*

[mews1945.livejournal.com]

Beautifully written, Barbara, each with its own emotional response.

[dreamflower]

So far as I know, yes, "dribble" is the name for this particular form. The words go down, 10,9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1, and it looks like a dribble of water falling (at least that's my idea of why it's called that; also, it's close to the word "drabble").

You can also have an inverted dribble, where you start with one word, and a double inverted dribble, where your first verse is a regular dribble and your second one is inverted. They are quite fun to write.

[dreamflower]

Thank you, dear! I do enjoy writing dribbles.

[grey-wonderer.livejournal.com]

Those are just wonderful. I enjoyed them very much.

[lindahoyland.livejournal.com]

Just lovely!

[dreamflower]

Thank you, GW!

[dreamflower]

Thank you, dear!